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:iconroseonthegrey:
Love the lighting. The entire photo looks like a 3D render; very cool effect :D

Also very cute title. The 3D rendered look does add a degree of irony to it though ;P

Composition wise, the elements work together very well. I may have included more of the sky such that the balcony(?) actually divides the photo into two equal parts (top and bottom) but that's a minor detail.

The column on the left appears crooked yet the columns in the center of the photo appear straight. This is just a minor issue due to perspective and optics that can be fixed either with the use of a tilt-shift lens or better yet in post editing through free transform editing (where you minimize the bottom of the photo yet keep the top of the photo the way it is, as if creating a trapazoid shape). If you are hoping to one day specialize in urban, architectural photography, a tilt-shift lens may be an investment worth considering though.

The photo is also very dark. There are some areas of over exposure so further brightening of the photo is not suggested. I do strongly suggest using tonal-curve editing to brighten the photo. By lightening midtones, the photo will become a lot brighter such that you will have to darken the shadows to compensate. Lightening midtones will also help reveal a lot of detail in the reflection.

I do have a tutorial on black and white editing on my personal website: [link] under How to - Edit black and white photos. If has pictures which may better explain what I mean by "brightening midtones."

Another minor issue that most people probably won't notice unless on full view: there is a tiny slither of white in the upper right hand corner that is fairly bothersome. I would definitely crop that out.

Hope this helps :D
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While longer exposures are definitely lovely to see at night, especially in black and white, there are some things you might wish to take note of here.

ISO: I noticed it at 400. Was the intention to create some grain? As far as it is, there wasn't enough grain to create a fuzzy picture that could be artsy on a new and weird level. And since you had a tripod, why not hit it at ISO 100 for the best untainted resolution? Long exposure would not have been a worry indeed.

Another question I'd ask would be, 'what are you trying to show in this picture?' like one of your comments, ~razzledazzlerose has pointed out that it lacks the element of telling the story on its own.

If i do take it that your title is the story's beginning, then by all means, the dinosaur should be the foreground focus! Right now, there is plenty of clutter in this scene. The stopped fountain, the back-facing dino (which you could try to move a little to the left to actually show the dino's front at least) and the buildings which were quite crammed inbetween the pillar supports which was the picture's only redeeming factor.

Step back, compose the shot, and think about what you want in the photo, what you don't want in the photo, and then you'll get something that pays off the effort for it for sure.
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:iconbluefootedcrow:
Haha, this is really interesting. Good concept :)
:iconrazzledazzlerose:
this is a beautiful photo, and it looks like you've done a great job of using a tripod & setting your camera on slow exposure to maximize the effects of the lighting...my biggest complaint is that the photo doesn't tell a story, which makes it drop a few points on the "visually interesting" scale. you need some sort of focal point, something that the view can instantly draw their eye to.

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Thanks! There's not much going on there at night, but I'll definitely work on it! I have another shot from the same night where there's a person in it, and even just that I was insanely lucky to get! Thanks for the critique!
:iconconstanz:
i'm confused, but i like it, maybe is too dark, but nice
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thanks!

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:icondrhazmat:
i really like the angle that you took this from
the dinosaur was just a cool touch

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I love the depth in vision and contrast ^^

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thanks! It's a Science Center, so there's all sorts of interesting statues there, but that dinosaur is my favourite!

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its cool <33

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